Talk:Coral friendly snorkeling

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Step 3...is it just fish out shouldn't feed? what about other wildlife?

Step 5 could say "Try to step on sand and gravel around the coral without disturbing it" or something a little more concise.

Step eight should have a comma between 'excursion' and 'make'

Step ten I would put at the beginning, not as a step but as a precursor to your steps.

Step nine I would omit or work into a few sentences of intro, including step ten.

that's all! looks awesome, makes me want to go snorkeling :) - annie

Good start.

• In addition to Annie's comments, I suggest warning about fins striking corals.
• Probably break up #10 into two.
• Do you have any photos?
• Safety issues? (Sunscreen, cuts, etc.)

--Erik

I agree with the above comments.

• I think the "steps" could be re-organized to make more logical sense.
• Maybe add and introduction with something like the benefits of preserving corals...
• Figures would be great.

-Mary